Comments on: Do Not Do Tomorrow What You Can Do Today http://ozbots.wordpress.com/2008/03/16/do-not-do-tomorrow-what-you-can-do-today/ jezze * catsy * angelo * aldrich * gj Tue, 01 Apr 2008 06:07:46 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 By: Wonderwoman http://ozbots.wordpress.com/2008/03/16/do-not-do-tomorrow-what-you-can-do-today/#comment-132 Wonderwoman Wed, 19 Mar 2008 15:39:05 +0000 http://ozbots.wordpress.com/2008/03/16/do-not-do-tomorrow-what-you-can-do-today/#comment-132 SUMMARY Jo tends to procrastinate. but when his dad died he realized the value of time. ASSESSMENT good introduction. i felt that this was written honestly. realizations don't have to look dramatic to the readers, they just have to be justified well with illustrations/ narrations. i think you did just that. some minor grammatical errors expecially in the last paragraph. the flow was generally good, though i think the last part was cut short. maybe you could end with a resolution. probably by returning to your intro? just a suggestion. also, this post reminds me of one spongebob episode-- squidward:..do tommorow what you can do today. mr. krabs: what is today but yesterday's tommorow? SUMMARY
Jo tends to procrastinate. but when his dad died he realized the value of time.

ASSESSMENT
good introduction. i felt that this was written honestly. realizations don’t have to look dramatic to the readers, they just have to be justified well with illustrations/ narrations. i think you did just that. some minor grammatical errors expecially in the last paragraph. the flow was generally good, though i think the last part was cut short. maybe you could end with a resolution. probably by returning to your intro? just a suggestion.
also, this post reminds me of one spongebob episode–
squidward:..do tommorow what you can do today.
mr. krabs: what is today but yesterday’s tommorow?

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